- Does the paper have a proper heading? Yes
- Does the paper have a title? Yes
- Does the paper include the writer’s last name and page number (top right corner)? Yes
- Does the Intro hook the reader? Is it engaging? Yes, I believe the first sentence of the essay is a really good attention getter, (for those that understand/know sports) it will get their attention forsure, especially because the situation about Alex Rodriquez’s steroid use was so dramatic!
- Does it provide adequate context (sets up a problem/issue/situation)? Yes, Specifically about the use of PED within the UFC, and how they are not enforcing good enough regulations about them
- Is the purpose of the paper clear in the Intro? Yes, the problem is stated right away, and the thesis shows what the paper is going to be about.
- Does it set up clear expectations for the reader? yes
- Is the Thesis clear and focused? Yes, it is clear. The body paragraphs focuses more on it.
- Does it contain 3-4 concepts? Yes, it contains 3 concepts
- Does it take a stance on a debatable issue, provide direction for the paper, and set up expectations? Yes it does, someone can definitely argue a different point of view.
- Does it avoid asking a question, stating a purpose, reciting a fact or simple topic? Yes it does avoid it, instead it argues a point that needs to be made/clear.
- Do the body paragraphs support the paper’s thesis? Yes, definitely.
- Are they fully developed? They are developed enough where the reader has a good enough understand of what I am trying to prove.
- Does each section make claims that can be verified? Yes
- Are these claims supported with credible research? Yes, by proper quoting. And citations
- Does the writer effectively quote and paraphrase from research sources? yes
- Does the writer make clear connections that explain how the research supports his/her claims? This could be worked on a little bit more, the connections are there, but it isn’t rephrased back into the thesis to make it a strong point.
- Does the writer use sound reasoning? Sure.
- Are there smooth transitions, connecting each section together? The Transitions could also use a little bit of work, I would actually like it to have a more smoother transition to keep the readers engaged, and not get thrown off the “wagon”.
- Does the writer identify and explore the opposition’s stance, providing evidence that refutes his/her argument? Yes, I’ve added a counterpoint to my argument so I am not being completely biased about my argument.
- Does the writer identify logical fallacies and how they affect the opposition’s argument? No, not much of it, a lot of the information does not have a lot of fallacies, if at all.
- Does the writer identify credibility or motivational issues that might affect the opposition’s argument? no
- Does the conclusion avoid repeating topic sentences and other information that’s already been stated throughout the paper? Yes, too much repetition of phrases and sentences being repeated is not really a good paper.
- Does the conclusion show how the paper achieved its purpose? Yes it does, Though the paper is not fully finished, it is set to have a good ending to this essay
- Does it answer the “so what” question? (offers new solutions, function as a call to action, and/or propose common ground?) Yes, it does. There is a solution to this problem for sure.
- Does the paper include at least 6 full pages of text (not including the Works Cited Page)? Not yet.
- Does the writer use the most current MLA style? Yes
- Does the writer use correct grammar and mechanics? Some grammer, but not much.
- Is the research properly cited? Not yet, they are not done yet
- Does all of the cited material correspond to entries on the Works Cited page? yes
- Is the Works Cited page formatted properly? Not yet shown.
- Does the writer use at least 5 credible sources? Yes, there are 5 credible sources, but not properly cited yet